I think this was incredibly annoying, i had to spam myself to click to play the movie, which got me frustrated, with that causes some problems because most people, (and i'm afraid i'm one of them) will want to sit back and watch....Not Click Click click Click click....
The other problem is that some viewers tend to be "arrogant" when it comes down to "Reading" dialogues which was obviously important to the plot, the only dialogues that most will approve of is that of the introduction and the Credits.. Your Title description "MS12Ds" is like a child's way of saying "you have to know what that means" you need to make it perfectly clear what it is your showing,
For all we know it could mean something to fix my shoes with,,
Obviously these aren't your sprites either, so we will let that pass, you had some good ideas with camera control and action scenes which is always nice, i approve of anything that has an action potential added in their story, there is always room for improvement, and i wish you the best of luck.